Dead. November 19, 2008
Posted by austino33 in Austin's Thoughts.trackback
It’s hard to believe that just last week, you were my world. My #1 priority.
Now, we’re not even on the same earth anymore. shoot, you basically don’t exist to me.
It’s hard to believe that in a matter of a month, everything changed. A month.
Now, we’ll never look at each other the same. My memories don’t even feel right anymore.
I cried over you. I don’t cry, okay? I hate crying.
I hurt over you. I’m heartless, so I don’t hurt, okay? I hate hurting.
Why is it that you feel that you can change me? You can’t. Which is why we’re not together anymore.
I can’t say that I hate you. I don’t. I don’t hate you.
I can’t say that I love you. I don’t. i don’t love you.
But I can say that soon, I’ll be fine.
When I get there, I’ll be able to blow your memories outta my head like a leaf in the wind.
DFA Writes 
the voice is realy strong.
i’d like to see some thigns not blatantly SAID in the piece, but conveyed.
like the crying (or lack of) and the hurt – use some rough, painful sounding words to describe this alienation.
i like it tho…
This is a really good poem! I don’t really think that you need to add words to describe your pain.. the description is strong enough.